Autobiography-1 (Draft one)
Autobiography-1 (Draft one)
My name is Hsin-Wen Hung. I am a seventeen-year-old easygoing girl. I was born in Tainan County in 1990. There are five menbers in my family. My mother is a housewife. She doesn't work because her health is not good. But, she is very good at cooking. My father is a worker in a personal company. So, my father has to support all my family's economy. But they also offer everything which we need and pay much attention to us. There are three children in my family. I am the first child. Now, I am studying in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. My sister is in the third form in junior high school. She is not good at studying, but she is attentive to do something. My brother is in the fifth form in elementary school. He is interested in playing computer games. I am lucky to be brought up in a considerate family.I like to watch movies, play volleyball and badminton with my friends in my leisure time. Watching the west movies can help me strengthen my listening comprehension's ability and learn some words easily. It's also can make contact with my friends. Play volleyball and badminton can train up our cohesion and unspoken consensus. And exercise also can make me become healthy. These avocations help me relieve my pressures and let me become carefree.

7 Comments:
"These avocations help me relieve my pressures and let me become carefree."should be"...pressure..."
third form這樣可以嗎,有查到此用法嗎
如果這不是正確的我會建議你用
third grade
Play volleyball and badminton
此句若不是祈使句
得使用playing. to play or it is..
let me become carefree. let可不可以盡量少用
west 我記得是western?
在查一下好了!
Watching the "west movies" can ...
應該是western movie吧...
me strengthen my listening comprehension's ability
所有格應該用of
就以上那樣囉..
沒有問題了~~~
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