Sunday, September 23, 2007

A Dream I Had (Draft one)

A Dream I Had (Draft one)
Sometimes people will have a real or strange dream. Recently, I had an unusual dream. In my dream, I was a lazy girl, so I always wished that I could have a servant to do all my works. Suddenly, my house appeared a person who was exactly alike me. When I asked her why she emerged from my house, she replied she was appointed to help me by a mysterious universe. I was happy to hear about it, so I didn't want to realize what the universe was. So I started demanding her to do many works, such as washed dishes, cleaned my house, even went to school instead of me. I had deeply depended on her since she appeared. But someday, she was out of control and started ruining everything. And then, she was found that she was a human cloning by nation scientists. Whereas so far our world didn't bourgeon a human cloning successfully, she was taken away due to make an experiment on her. After she disappeared, I didn't know how to lead my life. As I began thinking about what to do, I woke up all at once. In the end, I realize a saying which is “God helps those who help themselves.”

5 Comments:

Blogger Sally Sun said...

Sometimes people will have a real or strange dream
盡量不用will

who was exactly alike
who was exactly like me

due to 加名詞

5:23 AM  
Blogger Estella said...

my house appeared a person who was exactly alike me

可以改成a person who ....appeared in my house


to hear about it
用hear that比較順

demanding her to do many works
demand部分可以去看要命兼見
不確定到底要不要加to

6:58 AM  
Blogger Debie said...

"Sometimes people will have a real or strange dream. Recently, I had an unusual dream."can also be "...people has a ...."

"So I started demanding her to do many works,"should be "...demanding her do many..."

8:17 AM  
Blogger Vivian said...

Your dream was very special!!

5:11 AM  
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5:12 AM  

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