An Embarrassing Experience (Draft two)
Everyone has embarrassing experiences and so do l. There is a embarrassing experience I had in my elementary school.
One day, I wanted to go to the lavatory, so I asked my friend to go with me. When I entered the lavatory, I didn't know there was a person inside the toilet. Unfortunately, I didn't knock the door and she also didn't lock her door, so I opened the door immediately. When I opened the door, I discovered that someone was inside the toilet. So I closed the door as soon as possible. But at the moment that I opened the door, we looked at each other. That made me feel embarrassed and so did she. Most importantly that matter wasn't the only time it ever happen.
This experience happened many years ago. But I still remember now. Obviously, the embarrassing experience is not easy to forget.
posted by 薪雯 at 7:38 AM
2 Comments:
Dear Hsin-wen,
This is how I would have written it:
Everyone has embarrassing experiences and so do l. This is an embarrassing experience I had in elementary school.
One day, I wanted to go to the lavatory so I asked my friend to go with me. When I entered the lavatory, I didn't realize there was a person inside the toilet. Unfortunately, she didn’t lock the door and without knocking, I opened the door. When I discovered that someone was inside the toilet, I closed the door as soon as possible. Even so, when I opened the door, we looked at each other. I was so embarrassed and so was she. Unfortunately that wasn’t the only time it ever happened.
This experience happened many years ago but I still remember it now. Obviously, embarrassing experiences are not easy to forget.
I hope that is helpful to you. Good luck in your English studies!
I think "Most importantly that matter not only did one time."should correct to "Most importantly [is] that matter..."
By the way,you did well on the other paragraphs.
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