An Embarrassing Experience (Draft one)
An Embarrassing Experience (Draft one)
Everyone could have many embarrassing experiences and so do l. There is a real embarrassing experience I had in my elementary school.One day, I wanted to go to the lavatory, so I asked my friend to go with me. When I entered the lavatory, I didn’t know a person inside the toilet. And I didn’t knock the door and she also didn’t lock her door, so I opened the door immediately. When I opened the door, I discovered a person inside the toilet. So I closed the door quickly. But at the moment that I opened the door, we looked at each other. That made me feel embarrassed and so did she. Most importantly that matter not only did one time.
This matter already occurred for many years. But I still remember now. Obviously, the embarrassing experience is not easy to let a person forget.

8 Comments:
好像沒問題
Well, I think the first sentense should correct to "Everyone should have many...",it seems better.
some suggestions:
When I opened the door, I discovered (that)a person (was)inside the toilet. So I closed the door quickly →(as soon as possible).
看起來沒有問題
I can't find any problems.
But at the moment (that) I opened the door. →at the moment , I opened the door. 我不太確定是不是要先逗號再接下一句
ok的啦!
"There is a real embarrassing experience 加上when I had in my elementary school"
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